I moved to the tree as silent as death and ducked down. From afar, I could perceive the silhouette of the two bodyguards in darkness, clutching the spear tightly at the entrance of the camp. They were no matches for me. A professional killer like me would not miss a single target from this distance. I took aim and threw the dagger, which whistles against the wind and immediately seeps the life out of the poor victim. At the sight of his fallen comrade, the combatant took hold of his spear, however within the second, he too suffered the same fate.Is this extract entertaining? pls advice thank you?
Match in this meaning has no plural.
Matches are invariably those small wooden stick for starting a fire!
Also, your text has an awkward mix of present and past tense - please decide for one of them and stick to it!
Other than that, not too bad for a beginner.
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